Comments from teacher:
As it currently
Current overall grading of Production task (subject to moderation): 36/40
Joe- love the opening (0:00-1:00), beautifully shot, great cinematography in terms of tone, shot choice, creation of narrative and introduction to the character. At 1:50 you could cut to the girl in her bedroom looking out of the window or her looking in the mirror rather than her appearing in the forest, as she's just been in the house sitting on the stairs it might make more sense to use a house scene rather than cut outside? There would be more of a link there and then she can leave the house and you can have the forest scenes. I might use more scenes of her facing the camera or seeing the consequence of the character's feelings? I understand that she's alone, and half 'dead' essentially in terms of emotions etc, so what's the consequence of this for her?
In terms of an ending how're you ending the song? At the moment it just cuts out so can you pull some of the song together to create either a full stop ending or is it going to fade out?
Great job so far Joe."
While I feel the shots I have all look pretty good and professional, and that the idea that the girl is 'depressed' comes across well, I still find the video to be actually quite lacking in how engaging it is. Walking through the forest or looking out the window can't hold together a compelling video. I have decided I am going to film more shots, showing exactly why the girl feels like she does.
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